Chalk it up to experience?…
One other page has always bothered me. Its actually 2, because its a double page spread. I’m not sure how it slipped through the editing process but it’s fairly glaring. Once V and Sam rescue the whale, we turn to a double truck with the whales jumping out of the water happy and free. No problem with the main panel. Captain V’s inset panel is the issue. She is looking up off the page – bad. You want to know what she is looking at but there is a disconnect as you assess the page. I was probably looking for a strong diagonal layout so your eyes went from V to Whales to Sam to Tentacle. But you look at the main panel first and see the whales then go to Captain V and then to Sam so it doesn’t work. By rearranging the panels I have a distinct triangle layout and it keeps my visual information tight and connected. I added the net to help justify my reconstructing the image to include both above and below the water line. It also serves as reiteration of the dialogue. I suppose its debatable how strong a layout this new version is but it assists the story better and that is what tips the balance for me.
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